Chapter 5 they say i say

In the Article by Julie Charlip, she starts right of with a quotation by Marx and Engles. Who this comes from is fairly evident because of the obvious citation but others are not so obvious she goes on to write a question she once asked of her professor. Only after saying what was said does she say who said it, by saying "he said". In this there are several examples of using others ideas while also using her own.

Ch. 4 They Say I say Excersise one

After reading Jean Anyon's excerpt you can tell that she agrees that there are differences in the classroom from her summarization of Bowles and Gintis, and her use of language while she does it. Also at the end of her summarization she gives support to the argument by saying right out that it "offers tentative empirical support". Although i would say that her agreement is shaky her language in the body of the article is meant to show skepticism.

7. J

In terms of layout and design this paper most closely resembles a and article you'd find in a magazine targeted towards a music base, such as The Rolling Stones. But from contextual clues you know that this is actually a more formal paper. From the use of Headings and sub-headings we can see the this formal side of the paper reflecting in what the author chooses to highlight.

The appearance and layout of this design makes the reader take more intreast in reading the article. The use of pictures and the highlighted text keeps this intreast throughout the article.

It would definitely make the article less interesting to read and it would make it hard to keep interested in.

Persepolis Review edited

Persepolis as a movie makes a powerful statement. It is an animated film based on the graphic novel by Marjane Satrapi. It starts out in Iran in the pre Revolution days. It chronicles her life as she grows up. This in itself would not be an interesting base for a film, but because Marji is growing up during the Iranian Revolution, everyday actions are transformed into events that can be chronicled. Because of this violent time she is growing up in she is forced to deal with very adult issues, from a child’s perspective. Coming from a graphic novel, it faces certain challenges in setup and delivery. But as such it has certain advantages to other films that could present the same kind of story. The graphic novel itself is completely in black and white, using the hardline contrast to create a view that a child sees, as Marji grows up colors and shades of gray slowly appear. Persepolis excels in several areas because of this. In several parts of the movie it uses the stark black and white of the animation to a cinema graphic peak. Carrie Rickey, The Philadelphia Inquirer Film Critic sums it up with, “The film, mostly black-and-white figures against atmospheric gray and greige grounds that provide texture and depth”. The flashing scenes and the stark contrast is very reminiscent of the novel itself. The Use of the childlike animation to portray the harsh ideas outlined in the novel can really only be accomplished this way. When the movie shows her being assaulted by the older ladies in the full veils, the animation creates a feeling of crows attacking a piece of meat. It changes a verbal assault in to a physical one showing how scared she actually is. But although the animation is very simplistic, the art work is not, it has very beautiful scenes and with eye for detail you can pick up a lot from the images. The simplistic animation I mentioned earlier has one particularly great boon, it gives great freedom to express emotion on the faces of the characters and because it is simple everyone can connect with this emotion. But since it is from a graphic novel, it faces several challenges, the suspense, and feeling created by the graphic novel is lost in this rendition of the story, and being a biography already it loses that suspense without a way of reproducing it, and being a movie it cannot capture the feeling that can be created on a breakout page of the graphic novel. Adversely the movie also succeeds in a realm most American movies cant, the use of the French language and subtitles creates a better feel of the comic book atmosphere that an English film cannot. It allows the viewer to really feel the emotion of the words, because the viewer is reading the words on the screen, and listening to these words in French, the cadence, inflection, and emotion of the scenes really shines through the medium of language. Thus giving you the speed and information of a comic book while retaining the purity of film emotion, I felt despair and hopelessness several times throughout watching the film, when the revolutionaries have arrested Anoosh I could feel the pain through the movie, and when the characters talk about the deaths and the revolution, I felt hopelessness about how we could fix this. The filmmakers and the author really accomplished their purpose in this film, speaking to an audience that didn’t live through the newscasts of the revolution; they speak successfully to a generation, an extremely difficult task I may add. The use of the comic book animation in the film is definitely targeted toward this generation. All and the film is very representative of the novel itself, with an appropriate number of omissions and changes that are expected in the conversion of a novel to a film. An example of such is that Film starts out with the adult Marijane in the airport while the novel starts right into the story. Although these omissions are necessary I would defiantly like to see more of the story instead of the 98 minute limits of the film. All in all Persepolis was an excellent film and has my approval and blessing.

Spidey

The main difference that I see between the two is that the first one, obviously a critic, focuses on how the mechanics of the film worked and on details in the presentation of the story while the second one seems to be written by just a fan. The Fan focuses on the story itself and why it’s just a “great movie for everyone”. This actually leads me to doubt some of his views because he didn’t establish any credibility for himself. In one part of the reviews, they both cite the same scene, when aunt may is giving Peter a speech, the critic talks about how it was too long and drawn out, but the fan talks about the emotion that was conveyed and the fact that the actress got more than a cameo role. This is represenitive of most of the movie; the two writers have starkly different viewpoints but somehow come to a similar conclusion. They are both similar in the fact that they both say at the end that it was a good movie, but each one has a different tone in how they do it. You can tell from the writers ideas that the fan is writing from an excited satisfied view, but the critic, is well, writing from a critics point of view saying “that it was a good movie, but…….” All in all these two writes share much but take very different paths to get to a similar conclusion

In Eisner's article he talked a lot about the science and form of comics how they, almost exclusive have the ability to use text and control time in the way that they do. The fact that Text can be just as important as the pictures in a comic, surprised me Because its one of those things that we all know and realize but never KNOW until someone points it out. Also the fact about time and the staccato rhythm it can create to separate, slow down, and speed up time is exclusive to the comic medium of writing.
As an artist myself i found The second part of McCloud's piece to be very interesting and reaffirming, the ability of the human mind to take images and make them into what we want to see is amazing. The use of images and icon by humans to portray ideas and such have been around since the beginning of our artistic origins. The simplistic use of icon to portray idea quickly and completely, is Completely unique. there is little to none other medium that can portray feelings and ideas as purely as images(music set side of course. Even if i hadn't know anything about comics before this reading these article would have definitely have caught my interest. I cant wait to get more into this subject and cant wait to read more.

My writing process

When I write I usually write at my desk or on the floor with my materials spread around me, and I always type because my handwriting is atrocious (I mean really bad!) Depending on how serious the paper or assignment is depends on the conditions I write in. If it is a very serious important personal essay, I will write alone with my music going rather loud (classical usually when I’m writing, Metallica doesn’t quite get those gears moving as well.) And a must for any important paper is for me to write it in the daytime with natural light coming from the windows. I usually spend a lot of time writing because my strategies will probably cause a few to frown, I just put my subject at the top of the paper and start writing. If I can’t finish a paragraph I’ve stared I just jump to a new one with a different point or focus, when I’m done with this phase I pick and choose the best of my paragraphs, mesh them together and then connect them making the transitions smooth. After that I edit it and then send the paper to my English major girlfriend. Needless to say revision plays a huge role because of the amount of mistakes I make when I write. So help from others plays a huge role in my writing. As to peer workshopping, I’ve had little to no experience with anything other than the above.
Because my writing process is so chaotic I would defiantly want to try webbing again, I know it seem overly simplified for most essays/papers but I think it would definitely help me out in the long run if I got into the habit of doing that again. Probably the most unhelpful part of my process is the fact that I jump right into the writing, occasionally I end up not reading or understanding the prompt completely and have a lot of high quality ideas that don’t help me at all.

WorkShopping as a Genre

A workshop draft, as a genre, should be the first thoughts and outline of a finished piece; it should have developed ideas and the groundwork for a good paper inside of it. If it doesn’t have correct grammar and syntax that’s ok. But it should have its main points laid out. Its purpose is to feel out a particular audience and to figure out exactly the best way to speak to that audience, whether it is to be a science paper or a comic sketch. Most of the time it is written to the other workshoppers, as to get the best feel for the paper itself. Its purpose is there for not to the intended final audience but to the other troubleshooters.

Well first of all I would advise the use of another source altogether or to add another one that would make the paper work better. Also I would heavily advise him/her to write another draft that has a lot more information on the eighties interposed. The deviation from the intended subject hurt the writer very much in the workshop. Lastly I would just tell him or her to just slow down and look over there paper carefully. The many simple mistakes lead the reader to not liking the paper, not because of the subject, but because of the language. As we said in class his logos is severely damaged by the mistakes

ESSAYR

I would Give this guy a C. His writing is well developed and some of the simple mistakes are just infuriating, from the little things like mixing up his , theirs and there, to messing up his indentations. His writing was supposed to have smooth transitions from a source material. He only used his one source in the writing 3 times! And then it was cited very well. The rest was from his knowledge ! I almost want to give him(or her) worse than a C but i cant find any other more serious grounds. So C- is the final grade, harsh as it may be

Rick Lewis

English 1006 2h